Saturday, 30 October 2010

Donna Moore's Ramones Flash Fiction Challenge: The KKK Took My Baby Away

Donna Moore's Ramones Flash Fiction Challenge: 
The KKK Took My Baby Away
by Paul D. Brazill

He elbows me in the throat, knees me in the groin and kicks me in the face. I crumple to the snow smothered ground as he picks up a crowbar and slams my right knee cap. And then the left. Things start to go downhill after that.

A month in hospital and a year or so of physiotherapy. And time to think. For thoughts to marinade. And congeal.

***

The motorcade of wheelchairs is an uncoiled python creeping down the boulevard toward the stark white church.A clutch of cripples on crutches shuffle along –some behind, some in front. A group of burly men carry  a large white cross toward the man with the beard and the white robes, who is stood on a podium in front of the church.

They stop and, struggling, put the cross upright. The man with the beard sings an old hymn as he holds hands with a tall blond girl. Annie. My Annie. Or so she used to be, until Reverend Francis J Baker messed with her brain using a lethal cocktail of religion and white supremacist crap. Add to the ingredients two overweight skinheads who take me out of the picture and now she’s a member of the Imperial Order of  Knights.;The Ku Klux Klan’s even uglier and more stupid kissin’  cousin.

This meeting is known as The Awakening. It’s  where Baker fleeces the sick and gullible by giving them false hope. He promises to cure them and cleanse them of their sins. For a price.

I roll the wheelchair slowly  towards him. Luckily I’m wearing  gloves , the amount of shit on the street is almost as much as that coming from the good Reverand’s mouth.

‘Who want’s to be healed?’ he shouts.’Who wants to be saved?’

There is a sound not unlike that of rats thrown into a cage. Shrieking. Screaming.

The cross is set alight. It crackles.

A raggle taggle group move toward Reverend Baker. He sings. He prays. There’s chanting.

Some cripples begin to move. ’I can walk!’ screams one, who bares more than a passing resemblance to one of the thugs that beat me up.

This happens two or three times and then a collection plate is passed around.
I wait. I’ve grown patient.

As I get closer,  I get to my feet.

I can walk!’ I scream.

Baker doesn’t recognise me, of course. He wouldn’t since I’m dressed like a sweet old lady. When I’m almost in his face I pull off my wig. I wipe the make up from my face and pull a Colt Anaconda from under my tweed skirt.


Recognition hits Baker like a Rocket To Russia.

'I guess I'm just too tough to die,' I say.

Annie screams.Reverend Baker is apoplectic, babbling.

‘Gaba gabba ...’ says Baker, in his  moment of clarity.

‘Hey,’ I say, before blowing his brains away.

16 comments:

J Chon said...

"Recognition hits Baker like a Rocket To Russia.

'I guess I'm just too tough to die,' I say."

Nice.

Ruchiraa said...

I like "gaba gaba". Revenge is cool.

nigel p bird said...

full of music and good stuff.
bruises bigger than dinner plates.

Harry said...

" A clutch of cripples on crutches shuffle..." Cool stuff Paul!

Julie Lewthwaite said...

Lovely stuff, mate - very nicely done!

This is a great challenge, isn't it? Must get my one written!

Paul D. Brazill said...

Thanks all. Joolz, you HAVE to!

Sean Patrick Reardon said...

That was one hell of an opening that hooked me, and you reeled me right to the end. Thanks for th eheads up on the challenge. Going to try and put something together for it. Love working under presssure!

Crybbe666 said...

"Gaba gaba..."
"Hey!"

Great story, Paul. I like the description of the Imperial Order of Knights, and the feel you created of the "rally"...very nice!

(and the Ramones challenge was kinda cool too!)

Alan Griffiths said...

Yep, cool stuff, Mr Brazill. Well done sir.

Dorte H said...

Great story.

I loved these lines:

And time to think. For thoughts to marinade. And congeal.

Paul D. Brazill said...

Thanks all.

Cormac Brown said...

Well done, Sir Decibels De Hartlepool.

John Weagly said...

Nice!

Donna said...

Niiiiiiiiiiiiiice! Love the Ramones references - very clever. Those last two lines are sheer brilliance.

helencaldwell said...

Brilliant! I do love a good revenge story.

Heath said...

Just bril. Clever, clever, clever...

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